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Liquid Desire

pink and crimson
are your sighs and moans
submerging in the splendor of white
in a rainbow arch you rise to steal
the riot of colors with a squeal

raj (sublime_ocean)

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thank you for the read and your comment..i hope it was effective in as much as reminiscing with a smile...:)

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Now I know why you are also called sublime_ocean.

How beautiful this is, in the moment of its capture, and the way the reach of soaring pleasure starts physical, rises into delight, and then is brought back into the flesh, at the ending.

Sublime, my friend

Respectfully, Jim

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like Rosina..you too captured the essence of this write perfectly....thanks for the read and your encouraging comment...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Orgasmic feeling
And
The culmination of the eruption
And
Anointment,
In the milk divine
A sealing of human ecstasy
Soaring as it collapses

loved

Thank you Loved for the read and your delightful comment...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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ur wonderful...
i have just converted this piece as
Ecstasy
u may read
as it is inspired by
uuuuuuuuuuuuu
thanks

loved

Oh Ok...i will surely read it..nice to know you found this write inspiring..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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not only sublime
but as you say an ocean
and i now know when ............

loved

sweetly erotic, not brash. Takes me to nice dreamy places. You take my breath away with this piece.

always, Cat

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thank you for your time and visit to this write...good to know from your comment that you found it effective...means a lot to receive such encouraging comment from the likes of you...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Perfect words to explain something which leaves us speechless. I loved your use of color. Beautiful.

Thank you for the read and your comment....it feels good when the reader partakes in the essence of what i try to express through the lines...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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thank you for the read and your appreciative comments..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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i really like this little write
so gentle and you can feel the love (or lust lol)

nothing to crit

hugs
judy
xxxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

good to see you and thank you\ for your appreciation...your comment made me smile because you got it right.,...it is in fact a blend of both love n lust i had intended to convey through those colors.:)

much love n hugz...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I was beginning to think you'd dropped off the face of the earth lol. This is a really effective use of transposing imagery and also pleasant to read..............stan

it is always good to hear from your Stan and your humor ..i am still here on this planet so don't believe that i am ghost writing :lol...fun apart...thank you for your comment ..means a lot for an amateur like me...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I am a fan of your poetry! I love the skill you use - you are truly a word smith - you dig deep and your work is inspiring. You have a furtive imagination and use wonderful imagery.

Thank you for sharing you talent.

Love Mand xxxxx

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