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Her Calling

It was sweet surprise to see her
at first I thought was a dream
but it happened to be true
when I got hooked by her eyes

I read in them a calling
clearer than a spoken word
reading smoothly like a poem
in verse after verse after verse

each verse spake of she and me
sparkling with dew in her eyes
they held me captive in each line
enticing me with their words

her calling...

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Will you be my mate O! dear
in my heart are beats of thine
hearing them got me here
does thine too beat with mine? !!1!!

If it does, then hold me close
keep me warm in your embrace
through all our highs and lows
I'll need that comforting space !!2!!

See the longing in my eyes
to make you forever mine
there's a tremble in my thighs
with a craving to entwine !!3!!

Undo my layers one at a time
to savor my beautiful form
you will see me in my prime
when I turn on my charm !!4!!

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I just couldn't turn down her invite
and soon had her on a date
in candle light we wined and dined
no wonder I became her mate

That night was like never before
seemed almost like a paradise
when we woke up in the morning
we relieved the night in daylight

she did leave her mark for sure
on my back right down the spine
but while we had a shower
it was lost in our laughter

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Not Explicit Content

Comments

wow, I'm still dizzy from the intensity of this communication poem! I almost felt like I was intruding on your privacy. wonderfully executed! thank you for sharing this!

*hugs, Cat
*

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it's always a wonderful feeling to get a comment of appreciation from the likes of you....you can never intrude my privacy dear...feel welcome....your comment is like a tonic...

thanks...

hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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i have done a tiny edit on your first part of the poem, I hope you dont mind just to see it

It was a sweet surprise to see her
at first I thought was a dream
but it happened to be true
I got hooked by her eyes
I read in them a calling

clearer than a spoken word
reading smoothly like a poem
in verse after verse after verse

each verse spoke of she and I
sparkling with dew in her eyes
they held me captive in each line
enticing me with their words

you have one typo spoke?

i really love this i do enjoy the tender poems of love, the rest is wonderfully visual.

Thank you...Teddy

Thanks for the read and suggestion...i will think about it..meanwhile please let me know why you would like me to break the second quadrant....spake is also a word in dictionary meaning the same as spoke...

you may have noticed that in the second part "her calling" i have tried to venture into rhyme which actually is not my comfort zone..

Thanks again dear friend..i appreciate your time and visit..good to know you enjoyed poem and the imagery...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Sorry I just thought spoke instead of spake
Your rhyming is excellent if it's not your comfort zone

Thank you...Teddy

thanks for revisiting and your appreciative words...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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