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Mute Question (Tanka Couplet)

How did they make love
which seed did make her conceive
was it truly fruit

the fruit could sate her hunger
not the one which makes a child

it is a story
moms and dads make us believe
to put us to sleep

while Eve did eat an apple
did Adam pick her cherry?

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Structured: Eastern
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great questions! the end caught me by surprise and I LOL'd

*hug, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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thanks for your visit ..it was in response to Teddy urging me to write about Adam and Eve...so i tried...

hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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ya done great...I loved it!

*hug, Cat
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When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

"The Book of Styx" can be ordered and purchased on line at:
http://eddystyx.mythramuse.com/

thanks for re visiting and your comment...:)

hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I was caught by surprise as much as Cat was! Funny that! LMAO. ~ Geez.
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thank for your time....good to know you liked it and it made you LMAO :)

raj (sublime_ocean)

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oh Raj, how wonderfully thought provoking / comedy

you have something really cool here. love the ending.

love the title personally it brings the playfulness of this piece, Raj i suspect you have more up your sleeve like this. LOL love it.

Thank you...Teddy

you wanted me to do write something on Adam and Eve...so i tried to...good to know you liked it ...found it though provoking and loved the ending...

thanks...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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you devil you.

thanks for your visit...i take being called a "devil" in a good way :) good to know it made you laugh...

be well...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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