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Entend2u
Member since February 3, 2022
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When I was the Ocean
When I was the ocean and you were the sky
You were liquid light on my dark horizon,
A flight of birds in my cold dawn.
And in the tumult of my passion
You were the celestial orbit
Making love of this urgent tide.
I was but the tempera’d emulsion
Reflecting your million hues,
A deep cerulean tapestry
Woven from your silken rays.
When I was the ocean and you were the sky
We were spiritual lovers on cathedral waves,
Spectral lovers in water and light,
Embracing as rainbows in the crystal spray,
Scintillas of colour on the spumed crest,
Intense in the lens of the sun’s burning ray.
......but you were the sky
…………and you slipped away.
Entend2u’s timeline
- November 2023
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13 MonReceived a critique
on MY NORFOLK HEART from @Lavender
"I noticed you referenced that in your preceding comment and I watched. Lovely accent! Thank you! L" -
11 SatReceived a critique
on MY NORFOLK HEART from @Lavender
"I can tell this poem is very special. I looked up the local references, and they appear exactly how you have described them, plus your imagery and language add detail and how much they mean to you. You've incorporated t…" -
11 SatReceived a critique
on When I was the Ocean from @Lavender
"And I will go read "My Norfolk Heart" - thank you for sharing! L" -
10 FriReceived a critique
on When I was the Ocean from @Lavender
"Hello, E2U, Such graceful language and imagery, and your Last Few Words add so much meaning. Picturesque and poignant. Thank you! L" -
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- August 2023
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29 TueCritiqued
"You Looked At Me" by @paul Bartoswicz
"I liked the poem - emotion simply told. Just a note about two lines "gave unto me" - the construction of this line is archaic and doesn't fit the modern construction of the rest of the poem. It is also superfluous. If y…" -
20 SunReceived a critique
on My Tinnitus Came Out in Sympathy from @Ruby Lord
"How did I miss this? It was fantastic, loved every line and rhyme and the ending was perfect. Ruby :)" -
20 SunNew follower
@Ruby Lord
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20 SunCritiqued
"Sherwood Forest " by @Ruby Lord
"Speaking as a man of Sherwood I found this poem so evocative - it reminded me of peaceful summer days as a lad rambling around Newstead Abbey (of Lord Byron fame of course) and wondering how old the Robin Hood's oak rea…" - July 2023
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11 TueReceived a critique
on Friend, my friend from @Lavender
"So, it's only Monday?! How has the rest of the week been, so far? :) Very revealing gathering of words - heartfelt and romantic. L" -
10 MonReceived a critique
on Friend, my friend from @Geezer
"it tells a good story, and it's believable. I was slightly disappointed that the good rhyming was discontinued after the first stanza, but the piece still works. Nice. ~ Geezer. ." -
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10 MonCritiqued
"Once Upon a Time... Neopoet Challenge." by @Geezer
"Great poem Geezer. I can relate to it all. I was intrigued by Cat's initial unease about the last line so I'd like to comment about it. There are a number of ways that this last line can be read (out loud) - it really d…" - June 2023
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16 FriCritiqued
"Mythologized sun child persona incarnate" by @Jane A. Rug
".... any chance you can put this on YouTube so I can hear you perform it - sounds like a stream of consciousness (I am not going to be so churlish as to say "unconsciousness") - which would come over great if you shoute…" -
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16 FriCritiqued
"the last curve" by @Tiffany Smith
"She drove both of them both into a brick wall!! Great poem - brief and to the point - this is clearly your epitaph - sounds like you ought to write his as well." -
16 FriCritiqued
"Umbilical Severed" by @Rosewood Apothecary
"To me this poem is an admission that your relationship has had its day - it is a sad recognition that all that was warm and intimate has drained away and you are resigned to that emptiness that must come when love dies…" -
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02 ThuCritiqued
"Glass Slipper" by @Lavender
"........give me more Lavender - but don't share them - just send them to me and I will write you whatever it takes!" - February 2023
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21 TueNew follower
@Seren
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03 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- January 2023
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05 ThuNew follower
@Alex Tanner
- December 2022
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- February 2022
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28 MonNew follower
@lovedly
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15 TueHighest posting month
February 2022 — 8 poems
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12 Sat
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03 ThuFirst critique offered
on "falling stars" by @Breakinglogic
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03 ThuFirst publication
FOR SURELY YOU (AIR)
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03 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
Shakespeare, Dickinson, Gerard Manley Hopkins, T S Eliot, John Donne and others.
Be-Bop, Eminem, Kate Bush and many others
Hockney, Bacon, Freud and many others
Location: England
Recent Work
When I was the Ocean
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Friend, my friend
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My Tinnitus Came Out in Sympathy
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MY NORFOLK HEART
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LOVE LOCKS LEFT
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KEYBOARD HELL
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Your Golden Hair
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YOU ARE A SOFT DIAMOND
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A CROSS STICK TO BEAT ME WITH
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Ode to Miss Jones
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Contest Wins
| Winning Submission | Contest | Contest Date |
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| UNDER THE MISTLETOE | December 2022 Random Challenge Under the Mistletoe | – |
| YOU SMILE, I BLEED | the MY POEM contest | – |