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YOU ARE A SOFT DIAMOND
You are a soft diamond
in the rain and morning light,
spectral at the surface
as dragonflies in flight,
delicate and beautiful
as blown and brindled sedge,
a rippled, dappled stream of light
I watch from water's edge.
Style / type:
Structured: Western
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
Just another bloody poem about unrequited love.
Editing stage:
Content level:
Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Geezer
Wed, 2023-05-10 23:53
Making...
the connection of love and nature. A wealth of vision created by the beautiful word descriptions. ~ Geezer.
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Entend2u
Thu, 2023-05-11 01:38
Thanks Geezer
You are spot on. Infused through this, and some of my other poems, is the Norfolk (UK) landscape - a distinct geographical area that has a special place for me - where I spent some of the happiest most unhappy years of my life - torn between the responsibility of a wife and young family and my obsession with a young woman who would not spurn me nor would overtly respond to me. But for my ability to subsume my emotions in poetry many lives would have been wrecked. I will post another one after 23 hours - you will see the similarity.
(see also my poem "For surely you (air)"
author commentGeezer
Thu, 2023-05-11 08:41
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up! ~ Geezer.
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