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When I was the Ocean

When I was the ocean and you were the sky
You were liquid light on my dark horizon,
A flight of birds in my cold dawn.
And in the tumult of my passion
You were the celestial orbit
Making love of this urgent tide.
I was but the tempera’d emulsion
Reflecting your million hues,
A deep cerulean tapestry
Woven from your silken rays.
When I was the ocean and you were the sky
We were spiritual lovers on cathedral waves,
Spectral lovers in water and light,
Embracing as rainbows in the crystal spray,
Scintillas of colour on the spumed crest,
Intense in the lens of the sun’s burning ray.

......but you were the sky
…………and you slipped away.

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For some years I used to drive to work due east along a ten mile straight stretch of road to the coast and then return in the evening due west. During these years I was attracted to a woman who would not respond to my advances yet would not spurn me. I had the pain and pleasure seeing the sky forever changing colour as I drove to and from work and the sun rose and set. She was with me every day. Then she wrote to me. Sky turned to rain and the ocean got wet. Purple Haze. (The word "spumed" should be read as if it had two syllables "spu" and "med")
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Hello, E2U,
Such graceful language and imagery, and your Last Few Words add so much meaning. Picturesque and poignant.
Thank you!

I am grateful for your comments. Please read another of my poems about this journey called "My Norfolk Heart" which I hope you will like.

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And I will go read "My Norfolk Heart" - thank you for sharing!

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