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Expoetation (with video)
We mine your clouds
for their silver linings
collect your tears
to irrigate their sorrow,
appropriate your joy
to fulfil a need to ode
we’ll even take your crap
to fertilise our nightmares
poets gather, mine, harness, exploit
we refine and distil it
and return it to you
different,
but still yours
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words:
I'm doing a few readings on Youtube. The quality will get better when I lean to combine my camera footage with my laptop cam footage
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Thu, 2018-04-26 14:06
I did add 'last few words'
is that what you meant?
It's shaky because it is emotional. I sometimes feel like poets exploit life, though giving something back.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
weirdelf
Thu, 2018-04-26 14:22
I put the link there
but you are right,
putting the text there they can see it at the same time.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
tyro
Fri, 2018-04-27 06:27
I love this poem because it
I love this poem because it rings so true. It's like being reunited with a family member who was raised as you, with same values and insights. One I will keep close to me.
Thank you.
T
The most powerful reaction
of mind on mind
is transference of sight
weirdelf
Fri, 2018-04-27 06:29
Thank you
Thank you
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
gregwa8
Thu, 2018-05-03 23:57
great! I like the humor and
great! I like the humor and the word play. mining for silver / linings. crap to fertilize nightmares. the last lines are powerful, too. "return it to you different but still yours." the way poetry is a gift that has been refined and distilled in our minds. I think that's one of the things I love best about writing at this point in my life: personalizing philosophy and (shared) experience. thanks for the poem!
weirdelf
Fri, 2018-05-04 04:38
see the similarities with your poem?
'Preservation' https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/poems/preservation
(A hint, don't put your titles in caps, it looks pretentious)
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
IRiz
Fri, 2018-05-04 09:26
Deep and honest.
Deep and honest.
You use words carefully and thoughtfully
I wonder if you want to say more about what is returned and how words of poem become alive.
IRiz
weirdelf
Fri, 2018-05-04 09:31
aw shucks [bows head and shuffles feet]
I don't want to brag.
Thank you.
cheers,
Jess
A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'
https://www.neopoet.com/workshop/rhythm-and-meter-poetry
IRiz
Fri, 2018-05-04 09:40
I guess I understand.
I guess I understand.
IRiz
IRiz
Thu, 2019-08-08 08:59
I read the poem again. I
I read the poem again. I thought it is a new submission.
It sounds familiar. It is a good sign when poem is remembered for its vibe.
IRiz