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Where are you now?

Submitted by AMOGELANG MOKOBANE on Tue, 2016-06-07 08:20

Say more to me in the words
Be romantic all girls seem saved
You stood on the word of swords
You standing and saw it shaped

Wait on me you are too closed
I cant say much under the blue
Just being in a world groused
Small words say like a glue
Feelings like a volcano aroused
Your stand inter soup

Minuets of the world and calm
Yet if you to be pinned
Super energetic like a rest cloud
The ain't no perfect glory
You can be out to a way in it

Enjoy and blur a shade
Allow me to save a spade

#vanMok

Editing stage: 
Editing - rough draft

Comments

Esker

Fri, 2016-06-10 05:03

Esker's picture

but the word use of good standing
and the passion frustration
and uplifted feel from the
exchange all here
the metaphors rich
and deep

fave line was
Rest cloud!

thank U!

AMOGELANG MOKOBANE

Mon, 2016-06-13 08:52

AMOGELANG MOKOBANE's picture

Thanks I really tried my best to get it out poetically

author comment

Esker

Mon, 2016-06-13 10:05

Esker's picture

best thing about knowledge and different perspectives
experiences....they all contribute to novel ways
of expression through the venue of poetry
of course on Neo..we all write from the heart
Bravo!

thank U!

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