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Your attraction

Where do you buy such class?
Can I study so I can finally pass?
I'd like my day you promised
I'm afraid you'll be missed
May be too comfortable and be kissed
But I would want my lips on addiction
You have more than affection

Remember Monday at college?
You got an amazing art of walking
You'd be Queen if I'm king
I've looked at you countless times
My heart having smiles
Does age matter much to you?
Would it be wrong to be in my view?
Remember last Monday at college?

Your rich color has texture
Not bright but the right context
Your smile with cute teeth
Oh God! I need a lady with class
She's older give me advice
Maybe she should improvise

You got the class in looks
Beauty in the brain
Style in your jeans
Maturity in your walk

I fear seeing you blush
But I can't stop the rush

Can I have the day you promised?
Is age really a matter to you?
Can I have you in my view?

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looks like a young lady has attacted you
nicely written

Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

Thanks for the input

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