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Irrational Man

she's lickably luscious
delectably plump
laced in skimp and lotions

my senses and notions
in mental commotion
floundering, reckless
in churning emotion

that 'come-hither' look
the hook
the crook

and so I took
a ravenous

god, I hope she's not poisonous

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Your actions aren't irrational sounds good to me but are you sure it's a girl.??????? Trying to figure out what else it could be lol. Good Write there, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Positively , absolutely sure she was all woman
the trepidation and Irrational aspect comes from
emotion overpowering rational thought;
Me, or any a man or woman, overwhelmed by sexual seduction
discounting concern for the consequences until after the fact!

a reckless game of Russian roulette these days, probably always was

be careful out there

Good to hear from you again. You are a major player on this site...keeping it active and engaging

thanks for all you do


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Sorry I didn't use your name, I had memory failure lol
Glad it was a woman you were writing about, now I will have to read it again lol The excitement when I thought you were talking about peaches.
Probably not her name lol.
Take care Al and thanks for your presence here also, Yours Ian.T

There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

deascription of your giving in to the moment and throwing caution to the winds and then wondering what you'd done

and I like your synopsis, you gots it

thank you


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The content is strong and has a subtest both scary and profound.
Bloody well done.

A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
'Rhythm and Meter in Poetry'

it is satisfying when a piece works in a utilitarian way, as well as artistcally.


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