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Indifference unsheaths its bitter
As mercy gathers her ruinous
The joker jests in courts of
A king he laughs at mistress
Envy fancies his moldy coat
As pride recites the songs he
Clairvoyance struck blind--
Her vision beneath
As deceit he grins though
Rotton teeth
As doubt drinks from the
Bitter cup
Greed will empty it--then
Fill it up
Vision blinks--eyes full of
As a lie and fear walk hand
In hand
Forgiveness finds her new
Cold shoulder
As lust instructs the way to
Hold her
Guilt it hides in footsteps
Remorse withdraws--his path
Is cast
Death he hides in sunsets
A birth alights upon dawns

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I have but one observation at this particular reading.... The pattern on the page is so evenly proportioned it keeps the eye from reading it without a bookmark or ruler. Maybe you would consider grouping lines and providing spaces between groups (stanzas, if you will) at certain intervals, just to aid the eye in reading. Cheers.

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