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T V O T K

The Valley of the Kings; sleeps
Below the moons blind eye
Within its mask of stars

Stone steps decend
Beneath the sandstorm
Amist the tide of centuries

Temple carvings beckon the night
And dance between
Twilights grasp

Swirling ocean of sand
Unfurls its innumeral golden veil

Sheathing and unsheathing
The Valley of the Kings

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Had to think about the title. Not bad.

I don't really have a criticism. This is timeless and evocative.

I like a lot.

Keep writing.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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only if you had read me
distinct

loved

I like this, and get a very distinct picture as i read. Regards Roscoe...

Roscoe Llane,

Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.

TVOTK's I saw the bones of the Valley but lost the feelings that should go with this ancient place where everything would have happened from birth to death in many ways.
Just me but would have loved more feelings in there,
Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Nice to see you around again, I really loved the poem I can find nothing to crit

always a pleasure to read your poetry

love JC xxx

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

High praise for my stuff, thanx
More to come...

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