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Vission
At the bottom of a large glass
Dies, tommorrows virtue
Saintly vision; hears not
Its tethered wings
Are blind
The maverick eye; feels not
Lidded affliction
Casts its thoughts towards sleep
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Ian.T
Wed, 2013-02-20 18:46
CS
There is a sadness about this piece, as if the author is feeling a sense of futility, I hope not, lol..
Should the Title be "Vision" with one "s".
Take care and keep writing, Yours Ian.T
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Frenchf
Thu, 2013-02-21 07:50
I though thre vission
Was almost like fission and so had some expressiveness with the write