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For August
Venus's eye stares above the garden
Its sullen eye blinks- then hardens
16 veils of August night
Venus shares with bird winged flight
The garden black beneath the heat
Starlight stands, as petals speak
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club special
Sun, 2013-08-04 18:33
This is an old one...
This is an old one...
author commentSeren
Wed, 2014-02-19 07:23
This is really quite lovely I
This is really quite lovely I am glad I came for a look, Nicely done hun
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats