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For August

Venus's eye stares above the garden
Its sullen eye blinks- then hardens
16 veils of August night
Venus shares with bird winged flight

The garden black beneath the heat
Starlight stands, as petals speak

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This is really quite lovely I am glad I came for a look, Nicely done hun

love JC xxx

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