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Indelible Memoirs
No alphabets can conjoin
to form words to express
what lips and fingertips script
stroke after delightful stroke
a poem in invisible ink
of those intimate liquid moments
indelible
They come alive
when I close my eyes
like glow worms and goosebumps
with fingertips and nose tips
gently strumming the heartstrings
and amidst them I hear
in a heightened pitch
your sighs
on the wrinkled sheet I read
those verses
in shades of pink and scarlet
tinted in moonlight
Style / type:
Free verse
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Rula
Sat, 2016-04-23 06:59
An apt title raj.
An apt title raj.
Wonderful use of analogy.
But not sure about "glow worms" . I never thought that "worms" might be of any beauty. Maybe I am missing something?
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raj
Sat, 2016-04-23 14:53
Thanks for being the only one
Thanks for being the only one to stop by, your time, read and comment...many find glow worms to be beautiful...
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author commentRula
Sat, 2016-04-23 15:36
My pleasure Raj
Thanks for teaching me something new. New vocab. and the "worms"? I don't think I can ever like them ;)
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raj
Sat, 2016-04-23 16:03
Hi Rula
Another name for them is I think Fireflies...may be you will now know why I said glow worms look beautiful at night...
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author commentGeezer
Sun, 2016-04-24 05:29
I thought...
this one very sensual and that maybe the worms had their own analogy. Yes, fireflies have a rare beauty about them; like earthbound stars floating through the garden. Nice work, ~ Gee
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raj
Sun, 2016-04-24 06:31
Thank you Gee
Thank you Gee
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author commentjane210660
Wed, 2016-05-18 17:48
Beautiful
Beautiful
Just glimpsing through some of your poems, this is gorgeous. Jx
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raj
Thu, 2016-05-19 12:52
Thank you Jane
Thank you Jane
Appreciate your taking the time to read this one and for your chimes...
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