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Her Majesty's Fall (limerick)

The Queen said "I'm going to the mall"
the King said "darling go have a ball"
when she returned late night
he couldn't watch her plight
she was groggy and about to fall
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maybe you need to rework the beginning of the last line.
[she was] groggy and about to fall ..for a better meter unless you feel happy with it. Always good to give a new form a try.
Good shoot with her and his majesties. :)

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Thanks Rula for your time, comment and suggestion. Your suggestion is spot on, therefore implemented already.

Good to know you found this funny. I was wondering if it would be viewed as "profanity" . Since this one is apparently acceptable, I will have a go with one more :)

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raj (sublime_ocean)

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This made me giggle. I have a vision of a very drunk Queen and a very embarrassed King. I reckon there must be a lot of Kings and Queens out there like that! Lol

I love your imagination and the fun loving nature of this poem.

Love to you

Mand xxx

Who can go to a mall
and have a fall
as they play with heaven knows whose balls
limericks 'tis after all

king can save his once for all
when a drunken sunken one returns
and asks
where am I
Where are yours!

Love your comment Loved.

Mand xxx

from the humorist me

Thanks for your read and humorous comment...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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i send greetings to those who deserve
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Good to see you back. Thanks for the time, visit and comment. Good to know you liked it.

Much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Looking forward to being more interactive! :)

Loads of love

Mand xxx

Sorry - Pressed save twice!

never mind...a good way to make up ..lol..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Hahaha...being a limmerick tried to pack it with fun....wondering if i should mail it to Buckingham Palace...even the Queen deserves a hearty laugh..what do ya think:)

Cheers!

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Really? I wish i had her email ID to send it to her...fun apart...good to know you liked it...may be I will try a few more limericks...

Regards..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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