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Her Deepest Tremor

aroused at her core

molten pressure triggered

optimal pressure increases

steam escape velocity extreme

plate structure agitation

fissure motion

set to…-_

– - shift jarrr!!!!!

roll-symphonic jack hammers

jolt- /sway… not-rock-ab’a

rock a-city– -seismic s- — - hu - d

d-e - – er - -

Calm to discombobulate’/disor’der

re secure civil structure…

until she shakes again

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Phew, that was a quickie ! but it worked lol, I have to say it was a little too soon to finish I think it could have been drawn out a little more but that's just me being greedy again I suspect, Sorry but I have to run I have a plane to meet in a few hours and I need to get sorted to drive and pick them up, I will say very well done hun I did enjoy the read short though it was lol giggle

love Jayne x

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but I had a little trouble seeing the poem in the odd language. It may just be me.
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