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With Words

with words we cursed
feigned laughter
then ducked

with words we whispered
touched lips
then fucked

with words we transgressed
improvised apologies
then smirked

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WOW !! this is a cracker. I loved it and cant find fault....

Bravo excellent poem....

sorry but I cant critique something that is tight
and the theme is brilliant ...well thought out and executed

love Jayne x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

You know I would laugh at this one it is so neat,
but I think that some of the parts could have taken longer, lol
Your Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Some situations just beg for words- and you give them. In neat quantity. It's like a whole week with a brand new woman/man: awkward, then not, hot, then comfortable.

Thanks for that :)

V

I have actually pondered over additional stanzas but I always came back to these core bits.

Oh words are indeed one of lives untapped apparatuses.

I was going for three examples of how words lead to, and get us out of situations.

In ink,
david

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