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The absence of you

I need you
more than ever
more than words can tell

Was it not just a small time ago
we slept as lovers do
where are you now

Your hand upon a soapy wet body
you chuckled as the water splashed at you
oh the memories
they flood back in torrents

Now all that is left
the tears of heartbreak

You left with no word of good bye
I searched for ever
to no avail

You fell off the edge of the earth only to
return
as my nemesis
my albatross
my memory

Last few words: 
memories can destroy
Editing stage: 
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Not Explicit Content

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Such angst... so well portrayed.

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I agree!

sorry I missed you thank you for reading

Chrys

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Thank you so much for visiting and commenting yes it was all so bittersweet I do appreciate you stopping by

Chrys

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Thank you ever so much I will re visit when feeling better and look at your suggestions more closly sadness yes mch sadness was wrapped up in this writing

Chrys

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sure that there are those out there, that can identify with this piece and the strong emotions that you elicit. Teddy has given all the critique I would have. Nice job! ~ Geez.
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thank you I sent you a private message regarding this poem

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Hello, Chrys,
I feel the sadness within this, and the heavy pain in the last stanza. Well written, Chrys.
Thank you,
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I always look forward to your visits thanks for commenting I am glad the sadness came through in this poem it was eant to

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