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The absence of you
I need you
more than ever
more than words can tell
Was it not just a small time ago
we slept as lovers do
where are you now
Your hand upon a soapy wet body
you chuckled as the water splashed at you
oh the memories
they flood back in torrents
Now all that is left
the tears of heartbreak
You left with no word of good bye
I searched for ever
to no avail
You fell off the edge of the earth only to
return
as my nemesis
my albatross
my memory
Last few words:
memories can destroy
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Not Explicit Content
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Comments
Ray Whitaker
Sun, 2021-02-21 19:11
So strong
Such angst... so well portrayed.
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Hannah Moonlark
Sun, 2021-02-21 21:14
I agree!
I agree!
c lynn brooks
Tue, 2021-02-23 08:45
Hannah
sorry I missed you thank you for reading
Chrys
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2021-02-22 16:07
Ray
Thank you so much for visiting and commenting yes it was all so bittersweet I do appreciate you stopping by
Chrys
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2021-02-22 16:10
Teddy
Thank you ever so much I will re visit when feeling better and look at your suggestions more closly sadness yes mch sadness was wrapped up in this writing
Chrys
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Geezer
Mon, 2021-02-22 06:32
I am...
sure that there are those out there, that can identify with this piece and the strong emotions that you elicit. Teddy has given all the critique I would have. Nice job! ~ Geez.
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c lynn brooks
Mon, 2021-02-22 16:11
Gee
thank you I sent you a private message regarding this poem
Chrys
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Lavender
Mon, 2021-02-22 08:30
The Absence of You
Hello, Chrys,
I feel the sadness within this, and the heavy pain in the last stanza. Well written, Chrys.
Thank you,
L
c lynn brooks
Mon, 2021-02-22 16:13
Lavi
I always look forward to your visits thanks for commenting I am glad the sadness came through in this poem it was eant to
Chrys
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