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wounds heal, leaving scars
like morbid stones on greens

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thank you Lonnie for the read and appreciative comment..it is my maiden attempt to express a thought as concisely as possible allowing the reader to expand on those lines as perceived by them and deemed fit....hence i coined this style as a twinket though there may not be such poetry form...lol..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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eloquently expressive! I appreciate!

always, Cat

When you fling poo, some of the stink sticks to you!

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thank you for the read and appreciative comment..means a lot while i try to come back from a block...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Thank you Rosi for the read and appreciative comment...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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leave it to you to think Haiku are too wordy lmao. This reads like the final two lines of a fine poem.........stan

this is my maiden attempt to explore the possibility of expressing more in fewer lines...i am going to try out some more ...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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thank you for the read and your appreciative comment...i am attempting to write more of these short ones...most have commented that they would like this to be expanded but i think it would be nice to provide this as a stimulant and let the readers expand on the theme the way they perceive it...

much love...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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I was thining this was a Haiku but then again no. I like how it stands alone. Little lines big meanings. Good job friend

Mona

thank you Mona for visiting this page and leaving an appreciative comment...

much love..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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like Subhash Chandra Bose in his IAS exam wrote

DIVIDE AND RULE .

AND CONVEYED VOLUMES ....
SO DO YOU WITH SILENCE!
RAJ UR UNIQUE...

loved

Ahhhhhhhh you flatter me with your comment Loved though i am just a simpleton...not even an iota of the great men like Subhash Chandra Bose

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Only great people
are humble like you
and I,
that's why along the sea beaches
we roll and the surfs pass by ...

But then some one looks back
and says
Wasn't he
HE?
Yeah that's
All about life aint it.

loved

Oh, this is good!

~A

Thank you Anna for your appreciative comment...coming from seasoned poets like you it is very encouraging...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Seasoned? Salty is more like it.

~Ac

salty? lol....i liked that humor....

well i should have said accomplished....which you certainly are..

raj (sublime_ocean)

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