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It is quiet again
There is a quiet that cannot be filled.
The songs of time are memories
Filling the air with make believe,
If only there was a continuation.
I asked the universe what is happening.
It replied to me in quiet tones
A purpose has been removed
A need must be found for think.
I understand you, I said to the universe
It is late, and I must hurry
Before winter quiets my mind
Just believe, it will happen it said
It is me, I said that patience has left.
I used your energy and failed
I failed to bring all of me in.
Now I have to withdraw inward
We will help you find a new pathway
They sent me a bouquet
The perfume lost my thoughts
Tangled for a while it did.
They talk of the road less travelled
It is because I only need
I walk with you once always
There on the beaches we are.
My now is fixed to a new pathway
I retain all those memories
Rejoice with me once more
Eternity awaits another walk
Comments
gregwa8
Tue, 2018-08-21 02:19
"There is a quiet that cannot
"There is a quiet that cannot be filled." A beautiful line. Seems like a poem about the conflict between a whispering past and a future that is calling, also tentatively, like a whisper. A nice read.
Sparrow
Tue, 2018-08-21 03:31
Greg
Thank you very much for you comment, probably a conflict as you saw, but I seem to be getting more of these the older I get lol.
I expect memories become entangled with the present and then there is their meaning, just me I guess as do many people judging the past with present dreams..
Take care out there and thanks again,
Yours Ian ..
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Seren
Tue, 2018-08-21 12:20
Ello Da
You know I've already read this one. I was also stilled by that first line it's really a beaut way to start this poem. It's filled with a deep yearning and I love this poem love love it. Kudos I love that first line wish it was mine lol
Love always Jaughter xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
Sparrow
Tue, 2018-08-21 19:03
Jayne
Yes I may have sent this one to you or put on Face book but not all on Neo read my face Book page let alone comment on the ones I put here.
I have sent a PM to you that will make the words seem clearer,
Take care and many thanks for commenting anyway.
Yours as always DA xx
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Unconditional love to you all.
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scribbler
Tue, 2018-08-21 22:52
Hi Ian
The first stanza of this poem could easily stand alone....well done
Sparrow
Wed, 2018-08-22 03:13
Stan
Great to see you here, maybe I will have to have some stress to write better pieces lol
Hope we see some more of your world before the winters snow..
I think that I need a cup full of energy on my think side, I shall ask the children to pop in and help..
Take care out there and good to walk with you for a moment.
Yours as always Ian..
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Unconditional love to you all.
"Learn to love yourself first"
Yours as always, Ian.T, Sparrow, and Yenti