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"Primeal poetry stage Two"

Today as time ceases.

The beat of the universe slowed
There an opening, I had to reach for
A lighted place full of unconditional love.
There as I felt my way, around all things stopped.

I can only hope that one day you will feel
I hear the whispers of the years.
Knowing that I can be part of the whole
I cannot tell much, or they will lock me away.

But I will describe to you of things in your memory
Never fear this place, it is your heritage.
I know I belong to this moment that lasts eternally.
They have told me so and I just await them.

Here I can be at one with all those I love
Also those to whom I have given good things
Many times we walk in the dark, it is our weakness
Yet if we could see this place, we would just be,

I have written for you my children of another place,
It awaits the end of your tasks here
Here you will judge yourself in all you have done
Each moment will have a consequence.

Never fear that you will be damned for your ways
You are here to learn of all things physical
Your being can only do things in your present form.
Travel, touch others always, this also is your part.

As the drums have faded now I feel their beat
It brings me back to our reality of being.
Teach yourself to know your own ways
Modify your physical life, to enhance your Spirit.

One day as things cease for you, call my name.
I shall be at your side to hold your ways.
I will answer you, for always it is my beings touch.
I have promised to quiet those drums.

Yours Ian T

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it were that easy, to find our path from here to there! I know that you have a lot of experience in doing this kind of thing and so I expect that you won't have any trouble with the second phase. Nice work!
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Reality in our reason and beliefs will eventually bring us all together as real Spirits,
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"A quiet Thunder" was "Part One", this is the second part of the workshop lol
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Yours as always Ian

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How about going back to stage 1, doing another trance session and just retelling the imagery and emotions, no interpretation at all, ok?

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Many thanks for your visit, on this one I used an out of the blue trip to the other side, and as you know quite a bit of my poetry dwells on what the children taught me, also the teaching we use to do in our school that Anne ran.
You also used a meditation journey once if I remember about caves, and I think a vortex of some sort I think you should find it and submit as an example.
I will try to put one together that will be for a reason such as healing or something, I am of late spending less time on the poetry side of things so please forgive if there is a delay.
You take care young Bru and know we love you as our own.
By the way you are my only Brother now as age takes to itself all the things we grew old with..
Yours as always Ian ..

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If you had been reading submissions to the workshop you would have seen that I have already reposted Watermana.

Ian, I am asking you to forget all your previous meditations and journeys, they are getting in the way of an authentic primal shamanic experience. Do NOT do one for a reason as described for stage 2, I want you to just sit back, listen to the drumming for 15 minutes, watching your 'eyelid movies' then describe what you saw and felt. Reportage, no interpretation.
Can you do that?

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I jotted down a new piece for you but time was against me as always so it really isn't top notch,
It's called Drifting the second stage is when there is a cave that we can walk in together as it were ..
Take care Bru, Yours as always Ian ..

Words can build a nation

just sit in a comfy chair

relax, breathe, clear your mind, close your eyes and listen to the drumming.
Then you don't see blackness, you see colours and forms.
Let go, don't try to think, just watch. The colours and forms will resolve into images. You are in a waking dream.

When it is finished just write down what you saw and felt without trying to make poetry.
Good luck.

A new workshop on the most important element of poetry-
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You know that I just reach out and touch those that are in Spirit, those many talks with the children and the help they let me send out daily.
To go into a trance as you have suggested is OK but there is a need for someone to be with you in this state.
You say these things are easy, we have complete connection with the other side in the trance state and Anne is the medium not me, it is a place of demonstration for others.
Shallow meditation is fine for healing ones own Spirit we use to teach this at our school and demonstrate it to other of like minds.
I hope that you gain from the experience, as I have told you many times I have 200 hours of audio tape of me talking to the Spirit world, some of which I have transposed to stories, I need a good tape to PC of just a talking programme so that I can let others hear some of the tapes.
I will leave it at this for now come back to me when time permits,
Yours Ian ..

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