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Sound of a Poem
Sound of a poem
is that tiny drop of thought
creating ripples
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Comments
lovedly
Wed, 2016-02-17 15:44
nice haikooooooooooo
coming raj from youuuuuuuuuuuu
raj
Thu, 2016-02-18 13:22
Thanks Lovedly for your time,
Thanks Lovedly for your time, read and comment,
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
alidzain
Wed, 2016-02-17 17:09
Raj
Well done.
Alid.
raj
Thu, 2016-02-18 13:22
Thanks Alid for your time,
Thanks Alid for your time, read and comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geezer
Wed, 2016-02-17 18:11
Not sure...
if it is Haiku, but sure did like it! Short, sweet and succinct! ~ Gee
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raj
Thu, 2016-02-18 13:24
Hi Gee
Appreciate your time, read and comment. Good to know you liked it. You are right, it's not a Haiku but follows the 5-7-5 syllable sequence...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Seren
Fri, 2016-02-19 14:51
OH !!! My big smile.
Applause Raj .. Brava ...
One of your absolute best my friend I am so glad i found it
Love and biggest hugs Jayne xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
raj
Sat, 2016-02-20 12:30
Thanks Jayne for taking time
Thanks Jayne for taking time to read this....nice to know you liked it...
much love n hugs...
raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Sat, 2016-02-20 08:12
love this dear raj
"Sound of poem" I thought this so poetic. It also personalizes poetry when you give it a thought.
I wished the third line would read more as separated from the two other lines. Try "ripples created " and see if you like it more.
I have already enjoyed :)
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raj
Sat, 2016-02-20 12:31
Thanks Rula for the read,
Thanks Rula for the read, your encouraging comment and suggestion...I will think about it...
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Shyanne18
Wed, 2016-03-23 22:25
Simply said but much said
Simply said but much said
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raj
Thu, 2016-03-24 14:55
Thanks Shy for stopping by
Thanks Shy for stopping by and your comment..
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Shyanne18
Fri, 2016-03-25 23:25
No problem I don't have a lot
No problem I don't have a lot of time but I try and be a part of things
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lovedly
Wed, 2016-03-23 23:14
I came back to ask
a drop is just a drop
how is it small
or tiny?
I wonder
can you inject some wisdom in me
how soever
dropish tiny
Is a drop in the ocean
bigger than dew
how I wish I also knew
raj ur sublime_ocean
raj
Thu, 2016-03-24 14:57
Hi Lovedly
Here I have used "tiny drop" in the context of a thought...not sure if you find it right..
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Thu, 2016-03-24 15:21
i just like your poetry
was only confirming
if twas a metaphor
tiny thought
great
Esker
Fri, 2016-03-25 14:29
Perc!
great poem in so few chosen words
thank U!
(I watch the coffee fill my cup..poetry for this poet!)
raj
Fri, 2016-03-25 14:35
Thank you Esker for your time
Thank you Esker for your time, read and appreciative comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
judyanne
Sat, 2016-03-26 08:23
great senryu raj
Love it
love judy
xxx
'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)
raj
Sat, 2016-03-26 14:05
Hi Judyanne
Thanks for your time and read. Good to know you liked it.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
scribbler
Sat, 2016-03-26 09:53
Hi
These Japanese forms are great ways to capture snippets in a few lines aren't they? Good job......stan
raj
Sat, 2016-03-26 14:06
Thanks Stan
Yes, I feel challenged to express a thought in short verses. Good to read your appreciative comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)