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Sound of a Poem

Submitted by raj on Wed, 2016-02-17 14:13

Sound of a poem
is that tiny drop of thought
creating ripples

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lovedly

Wed, 2016-02-17 15:44

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coming raj from youuuuuuuuuuuu

raj

Thu, 2016-02-18 13:22

Thanks Lovedly for your time, read and comment,

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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alidzain

Wed, 2016-02-17 17:09

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Well done.

Alid.

raj

Thu, 2016-02-18 13:22

Thanks Alid for your time, read and comment.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Geezer

Wed, 2016-02-17 18:11

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if it is Haiku, but sure did like it! Short, sweet and succinct! ~ Gee

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raj

Thu, 2016-02-18 13:24

Appreciate your time, read and comment. Good to know you liked it. You are right, it's not a Haiku but follows the 5-7-5 syllable sequence...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Seren

Fri, 2016-02-19 14:51

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Applause Raj .. Brava ...

One of your absolute best my friend I am so glad i found it

Love and biggest hugs Jayne xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

raj

Sat, 2016-02-20 12:30

Thanks Jayne for taking time to read this....nice to know you liked it...

much love n hugs...

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Rula

Sat, 2016-02-20 08:12

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"Sound of poem" I thought this so poetic. It also personalizes poetry when you give it a thought.
I wished the third line would read more as separated from the two other lines. Try "ripples created " and see if you like it more.
I have already enjoyed :)

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raj

Sat, 2016-02-20 12:31

Thanks Rula for the read, your encouraging comment and suggestion...I will think about it...

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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Shyanne18

Wed, 2016-03-23 22:25

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Simply said but much said

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raj

Thu, 2016-03-24 14:55

Thanks Shy for stopping by and your comment..

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raj (sublime_ocean)

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Shyanne18

Fri, 2016-03-25 23:25

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No problem I don't have a lot of time but I try and be a part of things

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lovedly

Wed, 2016-03-23 23:14

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a drop is just a drop
how is it small
or tiny?
I wonder
can you inject some wisdom in me
how soever
dropish tiny

Is a drop in the ocean
bigger than dew
how I wish I also knew
raj ur sublime_ocean

raj

Thu, 2016-03-24 14:57

Here I have used "tiny drop" in the context of a thought...not sure if you find it right..

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raj (sublime_ocean)

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lovedly

Thu, 2016-03-24 15:21

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was only confirming
if twas a metaphor
tiny thought
great

Esker

Fri, 2016-03-25 14:29

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great poem in so few chosen words

thank U!

(I watch the coffee fill my cup..poetry for this poet!)

raj

Fri, 2016-03-25 14:35

Thank you Esker for your time, read and appreciative comment.

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raj (sublime_ocean)

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judyanne

Sat, 2016-03-26 08:23

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Love it
love judy
xxx

'Each for the joy of the working, and each, in his separate star,
shall draw the Thing as he sees It, for the God of Things as They are.'
(Rudyard Kipling)

raj

Sat, 2016-03-26 14:05

Thanks for your time and read. Good to know you liked it.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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scribbler

Sat, 2016-03-26 09:53

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These Japanese forms are great ways to capture snippets in a few lines aren't they? Good job......stan

raj

Sat, 2016-03-26 14:06

Yes, I feel challenged to express a thought in short verses. Good to read your appreciative comment.

Regards,

raj (sublime_ocean)

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