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Resemblance
Connect with the rhythm of nature,
in its moods we discover
shades of life
in all their true colors
resembling mine and thine
Style / type:
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
alidzain
Tue, 2014-09-23 12:38
Raj
a nice short one.Thank you for sharing.
Alid
raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 00:32
Alid
Thank you for the read. Good to know you liked it.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Tue, 2014-09-23 17:11
beautiful
and
friend Ian will say
hey bard
how another one has been born
mine or thine
then divine thou and thy
and why not
why!
raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 00:33
Lovedly
You may have read Ian's response to your comment lol. Thank you for the read and your comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
lovedly
Wed, 2014-09-24 14:18
Yeah
he keeps me /us humoured else poetry may become boring
Ian.T
Tue, 2014-09-23 18:58
raj
hey bard, how another one has been born, mine or thine
then divine thou and thy, and why not "I"
Hey loved is becoming psychic,
well I never would have thought it.
There was me thinking he was as straight laced as the rest,
Now he dabbles in those realms of spirits.
Your write Joined in with the expression of think in colours, well done, though maybe a little to simplistic,
I shall have to send a seeker to Loved he is hearing things that I have not said lol,
Yours as always Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 00:36
Ian
Thank you for the visit and your comment. "Simplistic"?...honestly i had never looked at it that way. Now that you say it, it does appear to be simplistic to me. But so is the message too I tried to convey through this poem, isn't it?
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Ian.T
Wed, 2014-09-24 03:27
raj
I have probably been hearing the old time religionists shouting out, this is fine as the others say, though would like a little more conviction in the overall message,
Yours as always Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 13:55
Ian
Noted your observation, though honestly I am unable to comprehend what exactly made you feel it lacks conviction.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Roscoe Lane
Wed, 2014-09-24 01:29
Yes like it,
Yes like it a lot, succinct and very accurate. Regards Roscoe..
Roscoe Llane,
Religion will rip your faith off, and return
for the mask of disbelief that's left.
raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 01:51
Roscoe
Many thanks for your time and visit and read. Very much appreciate your comment on this poem.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Leonard
Wed, 2014-09-24 03:02
Hi Raj
Succinct and enjoyable.
Cheers
Leonard Daranjo
"When the waiting stops, the living begins"
raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 13:55
Thanks Leonard for your
Thanks Leonard for your comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Rula
Wed, 2014-09-24 03:15
Raj
I especially loved the last five lines...I guess this means that I like it all.
Beautiful!
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raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 13:56
Rula
Thanks for stopping by and your comment. Good to know you liked it.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)
Geezer
Wed, 2014-09-24 11:39
The color of us...
[Meaning]; Colors what and how we see, so that we become the color from the inside-out. ~ Gee
There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.
raj
Wed, 2014-09-24 13:56
Thanks gee for your time,
Thanks gee for your time, read and comment.
Regards,
raj (sublime_ocean)