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Romance in Absentia ...
As soon as I think of you
you are there
in every sip of cold coffee
I feel your warm breath
My arms ache to hold you
soon you reach out
from flowers in my vase
whispering hello
I pick a rose stem
brushing it with my lips
it blooms with your aroma
one of its kind
I hear a knocking
from within my beating heart
surely yours saying
I'm here sweetheart
like a flicker of a candle
you hold the light for me
while my heart is singing
never leave me alone
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pride brimming my eyes
restrain whelming tears
I salute her bedside photo
dressed in war fatigues
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lovedly
Wed, 2018-05-30 20:00
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raj
Thu, 2018-05-24 15:50
Thanks for the read and
Thanks for the read and comment. I may clarify that "fatigue" here is in the context of uniforms soldiers wear to camouflage not as exhaustion
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Wed, 2018-05-30 19:59
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raj
Thu, 2018-05-24 15:56
I didn't say you don't know
I didn't say you don't know what Fatigues mean Lovedly...I just clarified its context in the poem
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentlovedly
Wed, 2018-05-30 19:58
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Seren
Fri, 2018-05-25 14:40
Oh Dear Raj
*Applause* this is damn near perfect. Its a WOW. Loved it all my friend. This is inspiring stuff.
Kudos Raj..its so nice to be back.
Love J xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
raj
Fri, 2018-05-25 14:46
Thanks Jayne
for taking time and your good encouraging words.
warmly
raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentraj
Sat, 2018-05-26 05:35
Thanks Mark for the read and
Thanks Mark for the read and comment. Good to know you liked the poem and its titla.
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raj (sublime_ocean)
author commentgregwa8
Wed, 2018-05-30 19:56
I nice twist at the end. adds
I nice twist at the end. adds power to the vivid imagery leading up to it.
raj
Thu, 2018-05-31 04:52
Hi Greg
appreciate your time to read and comment...good to know you liked it..
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raj (sublime_ocean)
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