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Vission

At the bottom of a large glass
Dies, tommorrows virtue

Saintly vision; hears not
Its tethered wings
Are blind

The maverick eye; feels not
Lidded affliction
Casts its thoughts towards sleep

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There is a sadness about this piece, as if the author is feeling a sense of futility, I hope not, lol..
Should the Title be "Vision" with one "s".
Take care and keep writing, Yours Ian.T

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There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..

Was almost like fission and so had some expressiveness with the write

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