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untitled light

Submitted by Serendipity on Sun, 2012-12-30 05:12

the moon fills with light
silver ribbons beam on down
Earth lowers her eyes

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Editing - rough draft

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Rula

Sun, 2012-12-30 13:04

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"On down " a bit confusing but may be it is only me.

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Serendipity

Fri, 2013-01-04 08:31

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Light beams from the moon and on down to earth ... That's the way I mean
It maybe a language thing ? I'm sure its not just me me lol we say come on down

Thanks for the read and comment

Regards Jc x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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sueb

Mon, 2012-12-31 05:38

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lovely

Serendipity

Fri, 2013-01-04 08:33

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Thank you very much Sue !

Jc ~

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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