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untitled light

the moon fills with light
silver ribbons beam on down
Earth lowers her eyes

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"On down " a bit confusing but may be it is only me.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

Light beams from the moon and on down to earth ... That's the way I mean
It maybe a language thing ? I'm sure its not just me me lol we say come on down

Thanks for the read and comment

Regards Jc x

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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lovely

Thank you very much Sue !

Jc ~

("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)

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