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untitled light
the moon fills with light
silver ribbons beam on down
Earth lowers her eyes
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Rula
Sun, 2012-12-30 13:04
I find difficulty in
"On down " a bit confusing but may be it is only me.
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Serendipity
Fri, 2013-01-04 08:31
hi Rula
Light beams from the moon and on down to earth ... That's the way I mean
It maybe a language thing ? I'm sure its not just me me lol we say come on down
Thanks for the read and comment
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sueb
Mon, 2012-12-31 05:38
lovely
lovely
Serendipity
Fri, 2013-01-04 08:33
Thank you very much Sue !
Thank you very much Sue !
Jc ~
("Always and Forever") - (Never lose a holy curiosity.-Albert Einstein)