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untitled light

the moon fills with light
silver ribbons beam on down
Earth lowers her eyes

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"On down " a bit confusing but may be it is only me.

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Light beams from the moon and on down to earth ... That's the way I mean
It maybe a language thing ? I'm sure its not just me me lol we say come on down

Thanks for the read and comment

Regards Jc x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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lovely

Thank you very much Sue !

Jc ~

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

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