Join the Neopoet online poetry workshop and community to improve as a writer, meet fellow poets, and showcase your work. Sign up, submit your poetry, and get started.

Untitled

Submitted by Seren on Sat, 2023-03-18 23:42

I wore fear
like a winding sheet,
leaving behind trails
of dead dreams

I held hope in my hands
and weeping, it slid
through my fingers
evaporating to naught

I undulated to music
praying for redemption
within the passage,
I was left bereft,
still, taciturn

But by relinquishing velleity
into the firmament,
and smashing my glass heart
for the loves' of my life

I've begun to believe
in miracles again,
I am finding the way
that comforts my soul

A shimmering lavender light,
shines with serenity
burns out the fear
and builds a blaze of hope,
by loving without doubt
the whips of regret
are now unmoving
fires have been stoked,
this mystery now has élan

I am flesh, reborn out
and into this life, once again.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing stage: 
Editing - draft
Content level: 
Not Explicit Content

Comments

Geezer

Sat, 2023-03-18 23:57

Geezer's picture
Volunteer badge

you are on the verge of a breakthrough, a change of style and a new lease on life. I applaud your copious use of words that
give the feeling of lassitude. It makes your ending of a brighter future all the brighter. Good work, ~ Geez.
.

There is value to commenting and critique, tell us how you feel about our work.
This must be the place, 'cause there ain't no place like this place anywhere near this place.

Seren

Mon, 2023-04-03 13:58

Seren's picture

Thanks for the read and the comment, it's very much appreciated. I'm really glad you liked it.

Love and higgliest bugs Sis xxx

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

author comment

Lavender

Sun, 2023-03-19 00:08

Lavender's picture
Volunteer badge

Hello, beautiful J,
"I've begun to believe in miracles again." Powerful language that can only lead to wild and wonderful, amazing things. So good to see your poetry again!
L

Seren

Mon, 2023-04-03 13:59

Seren's picture

Thank yoy for reading and the positive comment it's more appreciated than you know atm. I hope you're well. Take care.

Much love J x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

author comment

RoseBlack

Sun, 2023-03-19 09:52

RoseBlack's picture
Volunteer badge

You are on your way to finding brighter days! This makes me so happy! Transformations are a powerful thing and while we still hold onto the darkness, it doesn't control like it once did. Well done in all aspects!

~RoseBlack~

Seren

Mon, 2023-04-03 14:05

Seren's picture

Our whole lives are about transformation I believe, we have to go through stages of it. We all hold differing shades of dark and light. Some of us harbor more darkness than others. But sometimes you have to shine through it.

Love and hugs Jayne x

“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats

author comment

scribbler

Mon, 2023-04-03 16:50

Volunteer badge

The only constant is change so when things go badly keep in mind that change also brings good things

Candlewitch

Tue, 2023-04-04 07:34

Candlewitch's picture
Volunteer badge

you never cease to amaze me, with your wisdom and your discoveries! my favorite lines are:

the whips of regret
are now unmoving
fires have been stoked,
this mystery now has élan

I love you muchly. Siscat

*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.

(c) Neopoet.com. No copyright is claimed by Neopoet to original member content.