The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Title: I want nothing more.

Feedback:

1. Imagery: The poem effectively uses vivid imagery to convey the speaker's desires, such as "a perfumed breeze off gentle waves" and "desert sands so milk white." These images help the reader visualize and connect with the speaker's longing for peace and serenity.

2. Structure: The poem is written in free verse, with no consistent rhyme scheme or meter. This structure works well for the poem's theme, as it allows the speaker's thoughts and desires to flow naturally.

3. Tone: The poem's tone shifts from a sense of longing and desire in the first two stanzas to a feeling of despair and emptiness in the final stanza. This shift effectively conveys the speaker's frustration with the passage of time and the inability to achieve their desires.

4. Diction: The poem uses a mix of simple and more complex language, such as "isochronal lifetimes" and "husk decayed." This diction adds depth to the poem and engages the reader's intellect.

5. Theme: The poem explores the theme of desire and the passage of time. The speaker's yearning for peace and serenity is contrasted with the harsh reality of time's relentless march, resulting in a sense of despair and emptiness.

Suggestions for improvement:

1. Consider adding more sensory details to the poem to further immerse the reader in the speaker's experiences. For example, you could include the sounds or smells of the ocean or the feel of the wheat beneath the speaker's hands.

2. The transition between the second and third stanzas could be made smoother by using a connecting phrase or image that bridges the shift in tone.

3. The final stanza's imagery of decay and emptiness is powerful, but it could be further developed to create a more profound impact on the reader. Consider expanding on the metaphor of the speaker as a "husk" and exploring the implications of this image in greater detail.

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I get it. Most times, we [as The Great Mick says] can't always get what we want. Thanks for the new word, isochronal !
I'm not sure that I will ever use it, but you never know. I guess that my bucket-list should be short, as I don't think that there will be enough time to accomplish all that I would like, but I have my imagination and lots of good friends to help with the places and ideas. Don't ever give up, voids are meant to be filled and husks are capable of being reanimated with the juices that flow from our fertile friendships. Love and higgest bugs, ~ Geez.
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Hello, Jayne,
"...to feel a perfumed breeze off gentle waves..." Your description and imagery capture the essence of peace of mind, a sense of freedom in your heart. Such vivid language and emotion. I hope that all you've described and desire run to greet you soon.
Much love,
Lxxx

Your last verse reverberates in my soul. It has the same echoing sorrow that I feel when I listen to one of my favorites: Dust in the Wind by Kansas. I hope that, before that verse comes to fruition, you achieve at least some of what you desire.

I feel all of your poem, each stage. I sit in wonder at your poetic prowess. the two sections are like day and night/ cannot have one without the other. that, and they compliment the other!

*love, Sis Cat

I love this poem - if that sounds trite, it is not meant to be. There is such a sadness held within it, and a true loneliness (whoever this real for you or not, only you know - that is the beauty of poetry). personally, I celebrate the division of your poem , the divided sections of movement, desire, whatever.
Commentary is difficult at times: I had little hairs standing up in my heart ( yes, yes, I know they are not really there), but that sense of acknowledgement , a meeting place, was very strong. A rawness, a sorrowing, I suppose.
Thank you.
A delight.