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Temptress
Those Scarlett lips that take men mild
And in them raise a passion wild,
That pout and promise such delight
Those scarlet lips that light the night.
Those teeth as white as hound dogs flash
Men fall before as if a lash
Across their shoulders leaves its mark
And leaves them weeping in the dark.
Those eyes as black as Ravens wing
Flash in the night and seem to sing
A song to make a strong man wilt
Then like a knife stab to the hilt.
That hair as soft as golden silk
Cascades and flows like mothers milk
Across her breasts so full and ripe
Men bow their heads, their tears to wipe.
That face, so bold, so proud, so cruel
Can turn a wise man to a fool,
Can make him bend and crack asunder,
Can make him weep, and beg, and wonder.
This then is the one I love
And worship from afar.
Ten thousand years she has haunted me
My Angel from a star.
Comments
RoseBlack
Wed, 2023-02-08 18:20
This is fantastic
I love everything about it! It was tastefully sexy, descriptive and emotive. The imagery was fabulous. Well done
~RoseBlack~
Alex Tanner
Thu, 2023-02-09 17:52
Temptress
Thank you Rose. Have I found my forte? Alex
RoseBlack
Thu, 2023-02-09 20:19
I think
That you have..
~RoseBlack~
Rosewood Apothecary
Thu, 2023-02-09 05:10
Agree with RoseBlack
Change nothing about this. Good ending too.
Alex Tanner
Thu, 2023-02-09 17:53
Temptress
Thank you Tim. Alex
Candlewitch
Thu, 2023-02-09 06:57
dear Alex,
three votes makes it unanimous! let it be...it is wonderful!!!
*hugs, Cat
*
When someone reads your work
And responds, please be courteous
And reply in kind, thanks.
Alex Tanner
Thu, 2023-02-09 17:53
Temptress
Thank you Cat. Alex
Poets Hand
Thu, 2023-02-09 23:35
Temptress
Great no not great superb imagery and simile "those eyes as black as ravens wings" and metaphor "hair.. that flows like mothers milk" amid easy to read meter and rhyme. It's all there a masterpiece I do declare.
Well done ! I read this poem several times through and enjoyed it on each reading.
Poets Hand
Hannah
Alex Tanner
Fri, 2023-02-10 04:40
Temptress
Thanks Hannah very rewarding to read your comments, particularly since I enjoy your works so much. (I'll give Cupid a read when I get home) Alex.