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Editing - polished draft

Heavenly Home?

Striking Mother lode
Many light years beyond abode
To enforce our code

Unhinge fringe:

Missile strikes attacks
Pushed by political hacks
Innocent deaths stacks

Unilateral stage - collateral damage

Now t'is the season
For political lesion
Moral depletion

An Abdication:

Masquerade undone
Illusive victory won
Moral power gone

Rudyard Kipling’s If - Updated

If you can keep your head when all about you people are losing theirs and blaming it on you,
If you can trust yourself when everyone doubts you, but make allowance for their doubting too,
If you can wait and not be tired by waiting, or being lied about, don't deal in lies,
Or being hated, don't give way to hating, and yet don't look too good, nor talk too wise,
If you can dream and not make dreams your master,
If you can think and not make thoughts your aim,

Pander Bare:

Mission Occident
Capital shifting intent
Illegal torment

Dungeon of Wisdom

shuttered exits
only exist in nightmares

head-high weeds are sprouts
to a fence of knowledge

the problem with real
is its reliance on reality

the young and the new
are the secrets of entryism

you aren't ill even if you're sick
until you begin to lose confidence


Since shepherds had turned wolves,
devouring they own sheep,
then I better remain a sheep of myself.

Since the truth has been enslaved,
And the apron of Christianity is now a commodity
Juicing tasty venoms for the souls
I rather become a sheep of myself

It’s the eye we see,
The mind is hidden
tell the deer to run while the lion is asleep
Before the grave yawns hungrily
Sheepishly they accept the faith
The quest for miracles and signs
A prophecy long foretold.

Secondary Hues:

The two lone souls bound by a common aim
united for mutual benefit
this end pursued by agreement tacit
with a burning desire to attain fame
towards this very purpose primary
coloured by overarching, blinding zeal
utilizing a beg, borrow or steal
approach to combat any quandary
celebrating victories progressive
buoyed by dawning realization
that their rule was preordained destiny
employed tactics corrupt and coercive
more levels of rationalization
serial crimes lead to ignominy.

Solar Power:

With shift paradigm
waning wilting wintertime
shining star turns prime


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