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Submitted by Alex Tanner on Mon, 2024-04-22 14:37

Paupers of the written word
misunderstood, neglected,
the poet beats a lonely path
to tell his tales, dejected.

Ripped deep from out his tortured soul
bare thoughts wing home to roost.
On pages strewn with errors,
that hang him as a noose.

Do written words bring peace of mind?
Raise spectres of his fears?
Do they bring comfort, set him free?
Ne'er in a million years.

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Geezer

Tue, 2024-04-23 00:06

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at first, that this was going to be a loose and ragged piece; but when I read it aloud, I found that it flowed pretty smoothly.
Surprise, surprise; it seems that all is not as it seems! Well done sir. ~ Geez.
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Alex Tanner

Tue, 2024-04-23 18:30

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Thanks Geez. I like poetry to flow and rhyme and generally try for that. It seems to me it is easier to draw the reader in. Alex

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Candlewitch

Tue, 2024-04-23 06:18

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After reading this two times over, both aloud and silently, I have to agree with Geezer!

*hugs, Cat

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Alex Tanner

Tue, 2024-04-23 18:31

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Thanks Cat, Just one edit I shall make. Alex,

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Lavender

Tue, 2024-04-23 15:18

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Hello, Alex,
This poor poet soul - I feel the trials and the torment.
Thank you!
L
(I do wonder about the word "peace" used closely in the same stanza.)

Alex Tanner

Tue, 2024-04-23 18:34

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Thanks L. On reflection I think you are right about "peace". How does.
"Do they bring comfort, set him free". read? Alex

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Lavender

Tue, 2024-04-23 18:57

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That flows really well. Wonderful!
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William Lynn

Wed, 2024-04-24 11:00

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Hello Alex.

Well done sir. I enjoyed the content of the poem as well as the meter and flow.

The trials and tribulations of the poet well said. Thank you! - Will

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