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Short Verse

Rebel child
Something wild
Hard to forget

Failure to comply
Wrong in his eye
Stupid little bitch

Can’t you change
Isn’t it strange
Left behind

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I love the directness and straight to the point of this poem. Reminds me of my childhood and the young women who must have had those same thoughts. Well done. I would not change a thing.

Sincerely, trekker

I like short verse...quick and to the point...

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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Not sure, but I thought the third line in verse 1 better reads as( hard to forget ) as it is related to kind of bad childhood experience. I am sure I've missed something behind the curtains.
Anyways I liked your short verse.

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Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

what you are saying, but you have to know how to read the rest of the poem to make sense of the "easy to forget". Good poem though. In light of knowing the situation, you could still use the 'hard to forget". He is persistent! ~ Gee.
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Definitely sounds better. And yes he is..just for the wrong reasons

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

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