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Alstatian

Twas a dark and bitter night
My breath froze in front of me
Droplets scarring the snow below
Just a little further to go

With each step, I paused
Only to hear footfalls behind
Slowly I turned, but no one was there
A cold breeze circled and raised every hair

Suddenly the moon grew eerily bright
A silhouette drifted from its silver strands
As it weaved throughout the trees
I held my breath, hoping it wouldn't see

Slowly it approached, donning a star pelt
Glittering, its tail embraced.me, pulling me close
I felt its dead breath, cold and rank
Claws running curiously down my flank

I opened my mouth to speak
But it silenced me, as it changed
Now before me stood a man
Holding out his hand

Entranced, I accepted his invite
And to the star clad sky we went
I saw the world through colorless eyes
His rise, fall and catastrophic demise

Once upon a time, he had been somebody
Now trapped in an unfamiliar world
When we were done, he returned me
I wondered if he would now let me be

Very gently, he leaned forward
And grazed my cheek
Then he turned and let out a howl
Before fading away

For a moment, I was paralyzed
Wondering why he chose to share with me
I hadnt asked his name, though I wished I had
Then very softly, something whispered, 'Alstatian'

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I like this poem. Very good job.

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Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

author comment

and I appreciate the time spent on its composition.
You capture the atmosphere very well and it was a delight to read.

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Critique is a compliment
Kind regards, Alan
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For your kind words and critique. The poem will be displayed in tonight's Chat on the dark side. Hope to see you there.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

author comment

Balmy makes one think of [warm] not cold and frosty. Suggest you change it to cold, freezing etc. ~ Gee.
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Will make the change

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

author comment

...an Alstation?
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

Is what the British call a German Shepherd Dog, per my research on the name. In this poem, it is the name of the spirit.

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

author comment

You mean an Alsatian! (i.e a dog from Alsace, a part of French which is partly German-speaking and to which Germany laid claim.
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

For the clarification. The article I read was wrong and even misspelled the name

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

author comment

...be a good idea to correct the title to avoid confusing anyone else?

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Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

As a character name. When I wrote prose my characters had unusual names with no real meaning

Keep Writing,
Carrie

"Quoth said the Raven, NEVERMORE"

author comment

...calling a Pekinese a Pookinose? Or a Dalmatian a Dillmoron?
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xxx
Edna
Poet(ess) to the Stars

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