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The Sea Of Tranquility

As Father Time pens his last words
The winds of change are crying to the night
They mourn the loss
Another year

A year when peace did not come
Hunger and death still abounds
Sadness blankets the world

You hear them moaning
Why must this be
Where lies the Sea of Tranquility

When will mankind learn
To live as one and end what
Was so thoughtlessly begun

Their egos and money
Have corrupted this life
Will a time ever come
When a flag is unfurled
Denoting the unity of one world

Father time dips his pen
One last time
Then closes the tome
What he has written
Will never be known

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I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Last few words: 
Happy New Year to all, may it bring health, safety and prosperity( in whatever form) to you
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very expressive of your inner thoughts as one often ponders about when will peace truly be experienced on this planet....the title is very good and it made a good read....you might want to correct the spelling in the third verse from "here" to "hear"

the following lines echoe my thoughts too...

When a flag is unfurled
Denoting the unity of one world

warmly..

raj (sublime_ocean)

i am surprised that you are not able to correct it .....i dont know via which route you edit...try using the edit button at top of your home page...i tweaked my writes that way on several ocassions..

raj (sublime_ocean)

never mind...as is said "age is just a number"...LOL...

raj (sublime_ocean)

so perfect an apropos for the New Year, the ironic thing is that man seems not to learn that the earth does self correct.
I loved this write by you!
if you get a chance read my poem 'Artificial"
Always Eddie

LIFE ISN'T ABOUT WAITING FOR THE STORM TO PASS
IT'S ABOUT LEARNING HOW TO DANCE IN THE RAIN.
VIVIAN GREENE

hi there I like this as it is 'in the moment '
and the title that's other worldly,

' another year that peace did not come
hunger and death still abounds
sadness blankets the world '

that I like indeed, good though behind this
well put together ,,,,,,zigs

I salute anyone who breaks the rules in the interest of art and great poetry writing just as much as I admire poets who craft meter and verse within the confines of good grammar. Walk the tight rope or jump from it and see if you can fly.

Chrys

An excellent write with much thought and meaning to it. I really like what you did with Father Time and the unknown

Blessings to you and the family in the New Year ahead

Love Mona

I was beginning to wonder if you'd given up on us lol.So good to see you back .I also liked the idea of father time writing the world's story.You did such a good job vocalizing the yearning for a change in human behavior that I hesitate to suggest any changes. But I will anyway as I know you would accord me the same respect lol
L-4 try : of another year
L-5 change "that" to when
L-6 abounds should be abound, I think
L-13 change "they" to was
L-30 tell stan to keep his hands off your poem..............................scribbler PS how are you and yours doing?

I'm with Stan on this one. The imagery of Father Time writing our story is brilliant! I don't know how I missed this piece... I love it. My favorite lines:

Their egos and money
Have corrupted this life
Will a time ever come
When a flag is unfurled
Denoting the unity of one world

Father time dips his pen
One last time
Then closes the tome
What he has written
Will never be known

the last lines are superb!

Love, Cat

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