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Musings of an android( emotions in metaphors workshop entry)

What manner of communication is this
your eyes do overflow with water
and what of this gesture
one human placing it’s mouth on the other

such a cacophony of sound
being emitted by this tiny human
and why do they jump up and down
on their bottom ends

Are all humans such a dark shade of red
I expect that they might being
to breathe fire
would they not burn up in flames

I did not think it possible
that the orifice from which sound emits
could stretch from side to side
what is this contortion

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Hiding emotions in Metaphors for some reason the workshop menu does not have this listed
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Stanza 3 line 2, is the last word supposed to be ''being''?

Alid

yes thank you will fix it now see even the ws leader makes mistakes

Chrys
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You need to choose the workshop's name from the drop-list window. I've just added your name to the list.

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as I have explained to Wes I do not see my workshop listed on the drop down menu otherwise I would have as now I cannot post a poem to stream for another 16 hours I am well aware of how to post for a workshop but what am I to do if the site will not let me

Chrys
Let your mercy spill on all these burning hearts in hell(Leonard Cohen)

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I believe this is setting a clever example of what you wanted as a first assignment in this workshop.
Thanks for sharing.

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I suck at this big time. Still can't find a way to do it even after I've read yours.:c

Alid

As I said to write about talking to or listening to an emotionless thing is as my computer, I have tried to write about it but it is very hard, I am going away now to join the Borg to learn of their ways lol..
Stanza 3 did not flow and seemed disjointed I shall wait to see what you think first,
Yours as always Ian..

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Very good choice. Beats the heck out of Spock lol. So, with an android it would merely require better programing to explain emotion but even with the programing and resultant proper reactions to emotions would the android ever fully understand what was going on? BTW lines 1 and 2 in stanza 3 need a bit of clarifying imho.........stan

the poem was "fun". An android is a marvelous idea. It made me think of Asimov's detective series.
I think you nailed the assignment.
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