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Sad Irony

Submitted by Edna Sweetlove on Fri, 2020-05-15 16:00

I was sitting weeping on my verandah
As the sun went down over the blue, blue sea.
I thought: what is the point of clinging to life
When there's nothing worth anything for me?

And then I saw a little kitten, ill and weak,
And I heard its pathetic little cries for food;
I bent down to give it a tasty piece of fish
And it sunk its fangs into my hand real good.

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Structured: Western
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Editing - polished draft

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c lynn brooks

Fri, 2020-05-15 17:52

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A cat will do that until it is used to you.
The point found in this poem is that you had sown compassion to this kitty

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Edna Sweetlove

Fri, 2020-05-15 20:05

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..that even showing kindnesss to a kitten went wrong. It was just not the author's day.
Just as well I didn't mention the dead horse I spotted in the garden.
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Edna
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Gracy

Fri, 2020-05-15 18:22

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Good poem, Edna. But yes, cats bite when they are scared, it's happened to me and I had to have rabies shots, because it was a stray that fell into our small pool. I was trying to rescue it!
Best to leave food for strays on a plate or the ground. Nice topic, I have a lovely cat. No nits from me.

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Edna Sweetlove

Fri, 2020-05-15 20:06

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...just very aggressive.
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Edna
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Geezer

Fri, 2020-05-15 21:39

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a bad hair day just gets worse! But nothing to say that tomorrow won't be better. There is always room for improvement. I like this, because it shows that you were hurt more by the notion that you were repaid your kindness by a bite than just being bitten. Yeah, sometimes it happens that way. I don't let that stop me from doing it again; but with just a bit more caution. Nothing to criticize here, although I would call this free verse, not structured western. ~ Geezer.
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