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Poplar Leaf

Nine years the Poplar rooted above a creakbed stand,
enjoying dark rich soil, in rock sparse land,
amongst Mountain Ash and rosehip shrubbery,
reaching for the sky, a dream of destiny.

Springtimes came, winter went,
time passed, season's spent,
tree rings grew in number,
each passing summer,
bark peeling in season,
showing growth spurts as reason.

Homes and nests soon appeared,
some as early as the fourth year,
buds burst, life's thirst,
growing vigor, eagerly first,
first to drink sunshine's gift,
transforming nature's illness sift.

Dry dust dulls the leafs viridian sheen,
to deep sap forest green,
evening showers wash off the dust,
cleaning off the dull dirt crust,
revealing a brand new shine,
now fall approaching it's time.

The brown stem, now brittle,
a life time becoming little,
northern winds began to blow,
`frigid signs of an early snow,
leaf stem broke, launched into flight,
long and slowly from it's height,
back and forth with graceful form,
on a misty autumn morn.

It landed in Millcreek Creek down below,
dancing in it's current flow,
bouncing over log jambs and gravel beds,
as if it was being led,
through eddies and mirrored pools,
passing over past winnowed schools,
joining many more in a show,
as a canvas of Van Gogh flowed.

Style / type: 
Free verse
Review Request (Intensity): 
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction): 
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Last few words: 
A 8" X 10" acrylic will be posted on Instagram to coincide with this poem later this day. trekkerdekker is my hashtag. Millcreek is a real stream which I lived close to for fourteen years. It was in the middle of Edmonton, Alberta the capital city of Alberta. It was a place to draw inspiration for many of my pieces.
Editing stage: 

Comments

Do you know why this has been here for 8 1/2 months?

I would rather you tell me before I give me crit, ok?

cheers,
Jess
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I like the imagery and poplars are one of my favorite trees. Now I sit here and wonder why your stanzas are of such varied length as such variation in a rhyming poem is disturbing to a reader

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