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Campsite #25

Full of nature, so alive,
that was campsite #25,
bear, squirrels, and deer,
water music, twenty feet near.
Pine sentries on upper banks,
different heights, different ranks.
Guarding hidden fissured hallways,
shale plates of ochre, sienna, greys,
exposing the genesis stratum,
of this hidden kingdom.
This road mapped precipice,
sure to entice,
all who venture,
to this wonderment of nature.

Style / type: 
Free verse
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Last few words: 
This is about a site where I spent two weeks painting a canvas in the David Thompson foothills here in Alberta.(Crescent Falls, Nordeg, Alberta) The painting has been posted on Instagram under #trekkerdekker. That shows what I woke up to every morning there. The warden informed me it was the most coveted site in the campground. True solitude, true silence, true nature, I hope heaven is like this!
Editing stage: 


Tell you what? you now have two which you you say you made on Canvas...and one which you have painted here in words...enter this in April Contest...the judge is going to have a tough wishes..

raj (sublime_ocean)

Pleasure to read, sweet story


A smooth and enjoyable read.
Just a suggestion

Line three,
"bear, squirrels, and deer,"
try if .. squirrels, bear [s] and deer[s]
works better for you. You don't need to sacrifice the plurals for the sake of the rhyme plus it reads smoother, at least for me.
V. much enjoyed


Poetry is when an emotion has found its thought and the thought has found words
........Robert Frost☺

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