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Calling (Ode to the Cellphone March contest)

Shopping for produce at the local store,
potatoes, tomatoes and onions galore.
And in my haste, I bent at my waist,
as my cellphone fell from my shirt, into the mushrooms and the dirt,
It rang "Bad to the Bone", my cellphone tone.
I answered and the world stood still,
a presence leering, a yearning to fill.
A greeting of love, it came from above,
a voice "Matthew, God calling". I felt like falling
I caught myself on the rhutaga bin, thinking "oh, no did I sin?"
God Almighty asked "just how was your day?"
I had to think, It mostly went my way,
I blurted "thank you for such a great life!"
A house, two pets and a beautiful wife,
I had to realize just how much I was loved,
by God Almighty from above.
I felt the tenderness of his touch,
I didn't realize he loved me so much.
We talked for a while longer,
as I realized why God was the Father.
Now we have been friends for many years, through storms and the tears.
We talk now in regular fashion when we're busy and when we're rushing.
There never is a busy line, never losing much time.
He helps me through my busy day,
and keeps me safe and trouble at bay.
As a head of lettuce fell to the floor,
I said goodbye "please call me more".

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Comments

I try caching up with this poem but couldn't.
Shopping for produce at the local store,
You mean shopping for a product? ,well am only learning how to fish. Good luck trek.

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