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Pew
Sit in the pew,
sing your songs,
and hope your prayers go past the ceiling.
Whilst the people all around you smile
while secretly hating you.
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Review Request (Direction):
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Editing stage:
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Comments
weirdelf
Mon, 2015-11-23 15:49
Oh, you noticed?
Religion is a source of hate and diviseness,not love,
cheers,
Jess
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