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In Defense of Tedious

I've a young son
who digs into the pasta bin,
curiously grabbing the noodles
I've been drying all night.

I've a young cook
at work -
my right hand man
who doesn't yet know
the meaning of slow down.

My heart was broken
going too fast
in a world
and modern age
that moves too quickly.

So this is my protest,
my answer and rebellion
to those who tell me
"hurry up."

I could go to the store.
I could go to my car,
put my keys in the ignition
and pick up a box of perfectly uniform spaghetti
fettuccine,
or even vermicelli.
I could be done with this entire process in an hour,
but oh;
how that bores me.

Perhaps this would teach
my son and my sous
the lesson of moving on to the next thing.
But I find no satisfaction in that.

So out comes my metal mixing bowl
and I prepare my mise en place,
and I silently brag to myself about everything I saved
to make my noodles
since I only spent the cost of
flour
eggs
oil
salt
water
all night
two years of culinary school
two failed marriages
two decades in hot kitchens
my identity
and a floor that desperately needs sweeping.

All in all,
I believe this was an evening well worth the effort;
I'll worry about the cost at another time.

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Last few words: 
with credit to Blue Halcyon for the inspiration.
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Comments

the theme and the reality of this one. Yes, you could go to the store and buy them; but what about the art of being able to make them yourself? [Pointless question] you have already answered that. I'm not so sure that the word you are looking for is tedious. I really liked the list of cost. It told me more about you and your reason for this write. All in all, a good work that flowed pretty well and told a good story. ~ Geezer.
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I may have jammed it in there, but the poem was a response to a Facebook comment on a video I posted of myself making homemade pasta where the commenter (a fellow Neopoet alum!) said such work was too tedious for her and this was my response.

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