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It's Not the First Time I've Bled

It's not the first time I've bled
but it's the first time
that I remember
enjoying it
when I scraped my knuckles
and opened a gash
against the sharp edge of a stainless steel table
I caught in just the wrong way.

I smiled,
I remember smiling
and thinking
"this doesn't hurt too much."
It's not the first time I've bled.

Other than that
I wore it like a badge
for an hour or two.

My mother told me to be careful;
I may not survive the next round.

And sadly, this is something I think she would know.

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this is another example of your prowess in connecting a small event with a poem...

made good reading..
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raj (sublime_ocean)

what raj has just said. This is simple yet exquisite.
Especially liked the punch line about how mothers know almost everything about everything :) or that what I always thought. :-)
Much enjoyed!

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Reading this was like intruding on every word of your thought well done

There were those days and you brought them into sharp focus. Nice job. ~ Gee.
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