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Not Dead Yet

Somewhere in this pain
Grows life,
Skin of anguish thin across
Junctures caught between
Lust and joy
In simple pleasure
And heartbeats shared
With panting breath
And growing heat

Somewhere in this madness
Lives calm,
Pooling deep inside
The constant craze of unstopped living
In moments drawn
Out into stillness
By knowing look
And secret smile

Somewhere in this chaos is infinity
Eternal
As stars tear themselves apart
In frantic bursts of final light
To sear the soul with ecstasy
And crease the mind
With fractures of delight

Somewhere, far along this slow ride down,
Dark voyage stops
In moments spent with you
Eternities of wonder
Traveled in your reaching touch
Through gasping breath,
Thoughts filled with bliss
And endless thrust

Somewhere, in the swirl
Of approaching vortex
Time ceases
drowned within the shudder
Of your shaking pleasure
And I find myself
Still alive in your wide eyes
Dark soft skin lifting up
In desire and acceptance
Pure pleasure beneath me
Breath caught
not by my closing death
But filling climax
and release

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Free verse
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Comments

Of love and Of coition

Glad you liked it.

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Incredible poetry !

joe

Thanks Joe!

Respectfully, Jim

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

http://www.lulu.com/spotlight/Race_9togo

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