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On a day of Snowstorm (haiku)

Submitted by Race_9togo on Wed, 2022-02-02 14:49

The world turns silent
under thick quiet white blankets
fallen from grey skies

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Structured: Eastern
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Ray Whitaker

Wed, 2022-02-02 19:20

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You stuck to the form 5-7-5…. Like this a lot.

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Race_9togo

Fri, 2022-02-04 12:54

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It's been a while since I wrote a haiku. Good to see I still got it!

Respectfully, Race

"Laws and Rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" - Race-9togo

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Candlewitch

Fri, 2022-02-18 10:52

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I really like this piece. it is descriptive of today. how have you been? I miss you. I'll see if I can't get my e-mail addy to you. I would love to communicate with you. :)

love, Cat

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