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Moroccan Memories (A Sexy Sonnet)

I recall Halcyon Days, hot nights in Morocco
With a nice girl I once met in the Souk;
Blasted by the warm winds of the Sirocco
I can still hear her loud screams when we'd fouk.

Summer nights made us swoon with their spice
As we screwed non-stop, rapt in lewd lust
(her fat flabby arse was tasty and nice,
not to mention her forty-inch bust).
O dear African heaven with its blest shore
And the lovely old town of Tangiers,
(where a few Euros can buy you a whore
or a cute rent boy, if you're a bit queer).
And don't forget that famed Casablanca
Is the home of the masked Muslim Wanker.

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Please comment in English, not kiddies' slang.

Edna
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I'm sorry to see you've conceived muslims in such a way. I thought poetry(good one at least) should deliver good messages, and would you please tell me why and how do you call this a sonnet? Other than the line count, and the ending rhymes, I can't see this as a sonnet. Syllable count is very strict when it comes to sonnets, don't you agree?
I too can't see the volta.
Sorry, but you've asked for a harsh criticism.

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and sorry, forgot to say welcome to Neopoet.

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That was a joke, dear. It does not make any comment about Muslims generally, but refers to a mythical creature. Sorry if you are in any way offended. The poem is a joke.

Edna
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make jokes by mocking other nations/ religions...etc.
Sorry your poem and the joke behind it doesn't make any sense (to me at least)

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I see you come from Palestine. You might appreciate my poem "Onward Zionist soldiers" a bit more.

And, by the way, joking about religion (all religions) is fine by me and always will be. There is a difference between insulting a person because of their religion (I wouldn't do that) and mocking the concept of religion as superstition.

Edna
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Rereading this, Line 4 first stanza did you want [hear] loud screams maybe?

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Thank you.

Edna
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