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Mental Transportation
poetry
designed
sublime
pretty, sometimes
yet, simply a vehicle
a word driven craft
certified and licensed
for transporting
minds
Review Request (Intensity):
I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
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Comments
Ian.T
Mon, 2013-11-11 18:41
Al
A statement, but not seen in this way for a while.
Using poetry to send the mind to other regions,
This is quite a good base for a theme.
Would love a fight of a troubled being,
working toward that freedom of mind.
The bones are there now for the flesh,
Yours Ian.T
.
There are a million reasons to believe in yourself,
So find more reasons to believe in others..
brittle light
Tue, 2013-11-12 09:01
hello Ian
sometimes a simple statement is all I got! If I get more I'll give more.
I've always enjoyed a well written aphorism or epigram.
though not exactly poetry, they are still crafted
sometimes keeping it clear,concise, and with singular purpose is more rewarding to the reader, in the long run,rather than a fully dressed and developed version,
of course, I'm never really sure ... so, some are hits, others are a miss!
thanks for the visit Ian,
Al
Seren
Tue, 2013-11-12 07:14
Al
I really liked this short and sweet I love the message, poetry can make the world disappear ;)
love JC xxx
“The world is full of magic things, patiently waiting for our senses to grow sharper.” — W.B. Yeats
brittle light
Tue, 2013-11-12 09:06
thanks, JC
short is fine by me...as long as it retains the intended sweetness...sweet implying that it works!
thanks again for your support
Al